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    dots Submission Name: once I loved youdots
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    Author: koolness
    ASL Info:    17/female/city of evil
    Elite Ratio:    2.58 - 80/106/56
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsonce I loved youdots
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    I'm not gonna write you a love song cause you tell me to,
    I'm not gonna play this game that you insist we do.
    I'm not gonna buy you roses or say I love you,
    I'm not gonna expcet to say you love me too.
    I'm not gonna let you break my heart and leave me to die,
    I'm not gonna let you see the tears you've made me cry.
    I'm not gonna remember the times we shared,
    I'm not gonna remember that you once cared.
    I'm gonna write you a love song not cause you tell me too,
    but just to say that once, only once, I loved you.




    Submitted on 2007-12-28 16:01:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      hey sweets,
    Umm repetitious, yes but not annoying .
    The repetition of this brings out the quality,
    so for people like me that over think everything, it puts thoughts into the rare blank spaces of my mind,
    it speaks to me on different issues of my own life.
    This is what love turns out to be.
    Love can be harsh.
    Peace with the real love.

    | Posted on 2008-01-15 00:00:00 | by WonderfulComa | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this even though the repetition is a little annoying. I love the ending that is what brings the piece together. I also love the simplicity of the piece it is simple and to the point. Great write.

    &#9829;Donna&#9829;
    | Posted on 2008-01-08 00:00:00 | by PrettyHeart | [ Reply to This ]


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