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    dots Submission Name: Birdsong Dawndots
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    Author: oixi
    ASL Info:    50/M/California
    Elite Ratio:    2.85 - 196/243/100
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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    Description:
       Rhyming verse (with a song in my head) about the break of dawn.


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    dotsBirdsong Dawndots
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    Birdsong rings-in the dawn,
    As light creeps over night
    A glaring seed shall spawn
    To bring the morning bright.

    Slowly rises the sun,
    Greeting like an old man
    Crisp daylight has begun
    To thaw the frozen hand

    Of wintry night chilling
    Like a lover spurned.
    But warmth makes her willing,
    Dark frigidness is turned.

    Turned is her shadowed ice
    By warmth of elder shine.
    Transformed as if by spice,
    Or intoxicating wine.

    Birds sing to bring the day,
    Dark fades from passioned plea.
    Nature’s repeating way,
    From sea to shining sea.




    Submitted on 2007-12-28 16:44:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This poem was an enjoy to read. The personification of the rising sun and the cold from the night brought this it to life.
    | Posted on 2007-12-28 00:00:00 | by Sparkster | [ Reply to This ]


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