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    dots Submission Name: Tonightdots
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    Author: _Osiris_
    ASL Info:    18 Chick Ottawa
    Elite Ratio:    0.47 - 1/5/56
    Words: 150
    Class/Type: Poetry/Happy
    Total Views: 749
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 962



    Description:
       Okay, so the first draft was really messed up.
    This is the newly editted verison.

    My feelings and thoughts were so over the map on this night that I couldnt even write.
    I met this guy on facebook and thought he'd be just another friend.
    He asked me to hang out and told him before we did that I was lookin for something more then friends.
    My thoughts were that I would be bored outta my mind that night. God was I wrong.
    He made all the moves and for once I wasn't expecting it at all. It was amazing, I could really say that I was shy and quiet taken when he would kiss me.
    Taking a new approach to this relationship and letting it flow, and maybe this one will last.
    Dustin Barkley <3 I heart ya.


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    dotsTonightdots
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    Sitting here recalling
    Recalling this night
    Where we kissed for the first time
    Never felt another so passionate
    Yet so aggressive

    I close my eyes
    And I can feel them
    There your lips against mine
    But when I open my eyes
    You fail to appear
    Within my sight

    I promise you this
    You will always be on my mind
    Tonight has been one of those nights
    Where the unexpected
    Is the best highlight of the night

    You took me by surprise
    You held my hand first
    And you held it tight
    You looked into my eyes
    And I couldn't help but stare back

    This time Im in no rush
    To enjoy every minute I have
    That I will have with you
    Time to make memories
    That will last

    This is what I want
    My fairy tale ending
    Never to rewrite itself
    To keep




    Submitted on 2007-12-28 23:36:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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