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    dots Submission Name: Concave Mirrordots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 35
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       This came to me while plucking my eyebrows. The last two lines were added to appease Gob and Angelo.


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    dotsConcave Mirrordots
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    If only I could reverse this hopeless situation
    like a concave mirror
    flips an image
    when held at the proper distance
    and spray it with hairspray
    to freeze it that way.






    Submitted on 2004-06-26 04:32:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is funny and I understand it! LoL I wish I could reverse hopeless situations too, I also like hairspray so I would spray it that way to stay! Great write.
    --blt
    | Posted on 2004-06-26 00:00:00 | by borderlinetears | [ Reply to This ]
      lol! this was funny! i can't relate to the tweezing of the eyebrows tho. never did that... the idea of a concave mirror, though, is a cool and unique idea!
    | Posted on 2004-06-26 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      You have a nice short poem here. It's different and that makes it original. it was a nice write and i look forward to reading some of your other work. take care. Nice write,
    Jan,
    | Posted on 2004-06-26 00:00:00 | by Jan | [ Reply to This ]
      But I thought your current situation was you were shortly off to England to visit the BF? No? Or you would like to freeze that so you could stay? BTW, will you be offline the whole time?
    Nice minimalist work.
    | Posted on 2004-06-26 00:00:00 | by Sandburg | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this a lot. I thought the last two lines ended it well and the overall idea was superb. I don't really have any suggestions for editing because I think the poem is great the way it is. Keep up the good work!
    | Posted on 2004-06-26 00:00:00 | by Babysweet56 | [ Reply to This ]
      OMG...
    I have profound moments when I pluck, too. I've to do mine in a while (goin' out tonight), if anything interesting comes of it I'll show you and we can be pluck-buddies ;P

    I really like the freeze it with hairspray, did you read desiree by leper messiah? I think you'd like that, she's vg with her description.

    I do like this. Simple, unassuming.. it's my daily dose of bitesize CD....
    | Posted on 2004-06-26 00:00:00 | by Learah | [ Reply to This ]
      the last two lines are good. well done adding them. I like this poem very much. the thought is very original and it would be great if we could do it. no criticism here. well done Amy.
    | Posted on 2004-06-26 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      A merry little laugh then. Too much criticism for such a cute image. Rather than put it down, hold it at different distances and you'd be suitably amused at the different and strange transformation meeting your view. Oh no, I'm back to the halucinogens again. I liked this, if you did, forget any negative comments.
    | Posted on 2004-06-26 00:00:00 | by Lelik | [ Reply to This ]
      that could solve alot of problems... but... we can't. i'd be guilty of overusing something like that... i'm goin' around askin' the same question GOBALATA did... when do you put it down?
    | Posted on 2004-06-26 00:00:00 | by ANGELO | [ Reply to This ]
      hehehe...first i love your pic. second your poem is very good. Using the idea of the mirror, in particular the type of mirror truely captures your feelings and we as the reader understand what you are going thru. In a few lines, I am left to think "If only"
    | Posted on 2004-06-26 00:00:00 | by Broken | [ Reply to This ]


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