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To Those I Love And Those Who Love Me

Author: Sharati_hottie
ASL Info:    20/ Female / MICHIGAN
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Words: 173
Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
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This was Written by my mother when her mother died.

To Those I Love And Those Who Love Me

When I am gone, Release Me, Let me go
I have so many things to see and do.
You must'nt tie yourself to me with tears.
Be happy we had so many years.

I have you my love and can only guess
How much you gave to me in happiness.
I thank you for the love you each have shown
But now it''s time I traveled on alone.

So grieve a while for me if grieve you must.
Then let your grief be comforted by trust.
It's only for a while that we must part
So bless those memories in your heart.

I won't be far away for life goes on
So if you need me, call and I will come.
Though you can't see me or touch me, I'll be near.
And if you listen with your heart, you'll hear
All of my love around you soft and clear.

And then,when you must come this way alone,
I'll greet you with a smile and welcome home.

Submitted on 2007-12-29 23:15:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I think that's beautiful.
Not just the words, or the melody, though it is well done; but the idea as well. I love that she is trying to feed strength to herself (or so I am guessing) and many others in the time of need - when the heart loses its very reason to beat as strong as it does... And that she does it all in words.
Some people are afraid of letting go, and I think this would help anyone and everyone if they had the chance to read it. It would help the grief steps go just a little further, as it gives good reason to let go of someone. Great reason to let go of someone. Which is something nobody does well.
Letting someone go, doesn't mean losing them. And this poem clears that up quite well.
Inspirational to say the least.
Kudos to your mother.
| Posted on 2007-12-29 00:00:00 | by stefhy | [ Reply to This ]

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