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    dots Submission Name: The introduction into reality 101dots

    Author: atonement
    Elite Ratio:    2.71 - 106/186/98
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsThe introduction into reality 101dots

    How is it that when everything falls apart,
    when there is the greatest tradgedy,
    the deepest hurt,
    we unify,
    even towards our enemies we turn
    and say I am sorry for the faults,
    the pains,
    the lies,
    the heartbreaks.

    Why is it that we cannot love,
    except when a loss has happen,
    we cannot bear to glace upon each other,
    only if there are tears we can.

    It's funny how fickle we are as humans,
    to throw around the words of hate and judgement so carelessly,
    and when the other is cut,
    we sutra the wounds,
    with words of praise and love.
    How quick we are to change the mask of emotion.

    Submitted on 2007-12-30 00:02:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really like the concept behind this poem, being that we seem to pretend to be ok with someone only when they are going through something bad, or tragic. Most of my notes to make this better are more technical the anything else...for example I believe that

    "and say I am sorry for the faults,
    the pains,
    the lies,
    the heartbreaks."

    could all be put into one line to make it look a little better. Maybe add another stanza as well.
    | Posted on 2007-12-30 00:00:00 | by ParanoidParadox | [ Reply to This ]

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