Description: This is something to say about certain dreams, and this definitely happens to me more than once. Though I can't remember exactly how it ends, it always ends up with a steep decline downwards. Typically I actually wake up minutes before my alarm clock or whatever, so it can ruin a day lol because I like every minute possible and not knowing how long I got left :P. I think a lot of people could relate to something along this scenario.
A Dreamer's Mind -------------------------------------------
Flying through starlight,
A dreamer's mind wandering,
Hours later, falling.
Dolor,
This is not a Haiku; you need to change the last line in order for it to be 5-7-5.
Last Line:
Hou - rs (2) la - ter (2) fal - ling (2) :6 syll.
I like the idea, and it sounds cool, but if you change the last line to make it 5 syll, and make it have a bit stronger of an ending, I think it would be a very good Haiku; whereas right now, it's just a short free verse. There are many options for the last line, as the first two are very well done, so take some time and try to tink of which would be the best replacement in order to really make the reader think about what you wrote and feel the same way. Sorry if that's to picky, but that's what I think. Still, a great idea, and a good write, just change the last line.
Submission Name: A Dreamer's Mind
