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    dots Submission Name: Boredomdots
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    Author: Savannah Cullen
    Elite Ratio:    1.66 - 9/37/48
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 840
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    Description:
       A poem I wrote in French class properly describing school life for most people.


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    dotsBoredomdots
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    Sitting in a classroom
    Waiting for class to end
    but sighing when you see the next class begin
    Trying to find a friend
    To help you along
    Talking to ease your mind
    But it only lasts so long
    And there's always an exess
    This is what you get
    For too much time
    And nothing to do
    Killing your thoughts
    In their prime
    What has this world come to?
    All the pain it's brought
    How does it stay alive?
    I'll tell you how
    It feeds off your mind
    Stays there secretly
    Waiting for the right moment
    To strike
    To kill
    I sigh as it overcomes me yet again
    Boredom




    Submitted on 2007-12-30 13:47:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Ha! I know the feeling. Pretty good.
    | Posted on 2007-12-30 00:00:00 | by Draumrkopa | [ Reply to This ]


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