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Love Puzzle

Author: rachel gless
ASL Info:    23/f/mx
Elite Ratio:    3.56 - 68 /89 /37
Words: 103
Class/Type: Poetry /The pain inside
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This one is about a love that is just not good for you
Let me know what u think!!

Love Puzzle

A sword’s on my throat
A wall’s on my back
I try to move slower
Keep my feet on the ground

My hand searches a knob
It only finds none
There’s nowhere to run
From this love puzzle

Try harder to leave
I keep coming back
Is it an addiction?
Or am I just trapped?

Don’t know if it’s love
Or fear to be alone
My heart is filled with cobwebs
My hope’s covered in dust

I know it is not good
It keeps making me ill
But, what if it hurts more
If I choose to leave?

Submitted on 2007-12-30 20:43:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This was written very well. I really like how you ended it with a question, like there is a part to in the near future. It flowed nicely and the imagery was great. Keep up the awesome work, and I'll keep reading

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| Posted on 2007-12-30 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]

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