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    dots Submission Name: And I love you..dots
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    Author: Fadeintoreality
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    dotsAnd I love you..dots
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    When the dream came
    I held my breath
    with my eyes closed
    I went insane,
    Like a smoke ring day
    When the wind blows
    Now I won't be back
    till later on
    If I do come back at all
    But you know me,
    and I miss you now.

    In a strange game
    I saw myself as you knew me
    When the change came,
    And you had a
    Chance to see through me
    Though the other side
    is just the same
    You can tell
    my dream is real
    Because I love you,
    can you see me now.

    Though we rush ahead
    to save our time
    We are only what we feel
    And I love you,
    can you feel it now.




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      This is precious, simple and direct to the knowing, but very large in its meaning. I really like it. Nice write
    | Posted on 2007-12-31 00:00:00 | by forfila | [ Reply to This ]


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