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    dots Submission Name: It Doesn't Matterdots
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    Author: Savannah Cullen
    Elite Ratio:    1.66 - 9/37/48
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsIt Doesn't Matterdots
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    It had happened
    She guessed right
    For this I had not planned
    Though her look was not one of fright
    For a moment she left me hanging
    It let me think
    Her look was thoughtful
    Calculating
    I continued to imagine her reaction to me
    I asked her what her decision was
    Those three words made my dead heart beat
    As she said them, her eyes I did not meet
    It doesn't matter
    And it meant the world to me




    Submitted on 2007-12-31 12:20:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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       I enjoyed your poem. It was great.
    Your poem flowed nicely and it was written with a natural feeling to it. It made me want to read more.
    As I read it, I couldn't take my eyes off of it until it was done.
    "Those three words made my dead heart beat," was my favorite line. It showed more emotion in it.
    Through out your poem, your wording was excellent. It made sense and showed emotion at the same time.
    "Those three words made my dead heart beat
    As she said them, her eyes I did not meet" These lines are well-written and stand out to me than anything. Your poem left a great impression on me.
    Great poem. Keep writing and keep up the good work. I look forward to reading more of your work.
    Thank you for sharing your work with everyone.
    | Posted on 2007-12-31 00:00:00 | by The lost child | [ Reply to This ]


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