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    dots Submission Name: Watchful Eyesdots
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    Author: Soulraven
    ASL Info:    31/Male/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 510/481/142
    Words: 55
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1193
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 354



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       Standing Guard


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    dotsWatchful Eyesdots
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    Watch the fire light dance,
    Seeing the darkest souls prance.
    I the gate keeper in my awkward stance.
    Draw my blade Iron cold,
    Eyes silent and bold,
    Goal never fades defending the crown of gold.
    Blade humbly whistling forcing souls to fall,
    Tasting the fear of my foes in hearing my proud War Call.




    Submitted on 2004-02-05 15:38:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hmmmm. Sort of "Watcher of the Dead". The Grim Reaper. Gatekeeper of hell. Interesting concept. It needs one more line to complete your triplet pattern (which is marvelous, btw). <><
    | Posted on 2004-02-05 00:00:00 | by WorththeWait | [ Reply to This ]


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