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    dots Submission Name: For the New Year...dots

    Author: Drifting Star
    ASL Info:    19/F/Somewhere
    Elite Ratio:    2.02 - 22/101/73
    Words: 182
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Just a thought that popped into my mind as I made my way home from a New Years get together! Lol. Hope you like it; I don't care if you don't, though.

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    dotsFor the New Year...dots

    The distant sounds of cavorting heathens
    ride the wind like whispered joviality;
    I take slow, weary steps up the side walk,
    wobbling on tired, sociable feet.
    Those feet have carried me everywhere tonight,
    locked up in their stiletto cage tightly, with care;
    Click-click, the staccato of our travel,
    Like dimmed silver or brass in the darkness.

    The driveway stretches before me, the path to Oz,
    Though I don't have the heart, I fight til the end;
    My bed of straw awaits me and I'm okay with that--
    I bid my favorite lover goodnight.
    He leaves me at the gate and I walk through,
    treading the cobblestone path carefully;
    all the yard is still around me, silent--
    and the eerie glass of the pool reflects the moon.

    My mind plays tricks on me! Look just there!
    In the smoky shadows beyond the hedge;
    The bushes rise up like little goblins,
    the trees like stick-women-banshees.
    Shapes and figures, the colors bleached--
    all blends into white-gray smoke;
    creatures rise from mind to mist,
    a standing ovation in the dark.


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