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    dots Submission Name: Unnamed Feelingdots
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    Author: obaid
    ASL Info:    21/M/Gauntlet
    Elite Ratio:    4.52 - 148/93/34
    Words: 308
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 1041
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1923



    Description:
       I have written this poetry quite selfishly...as in I wrote this because just writing it helped me to feel lighter from the weight of all these unwanted thoughts in my head.
    Also this poem is something I would like my girl to read and hopefully...understand!


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    dotsUnnamed Feelingdots
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    To feel things you don't want to feel and think things which you wish had never entered your head!
    Do you know how this feels? 'Cause I do!
    I can't attach a voice to these emotions because-
    I am abstaining myself from them.
    Rather I don't want to because I don't want to be
    Overwhelmed by them!

    I just want you to understand that...
    In our relationship it's not a matter of "Give and take"
    It's about understanding one another...
    Loving each other at any stake!

    You're upset 'cause I am not opening up to you about 'why I feel the way I feel'...
    Just know that someday I'll tell you...
    Someday this barrier between us I will kill.

    You can't see me upset and
    I feel the same way.
    Although it's not always possible, I want to smile for you and want you to smile for me!...
    Every second of every single day.

    To express the magnitude of my love for you is
    Something I just can't get myself to do.
    'Cause no matter which way i put it...
    I know- more than that- I love you!

    Just promise me that you shall never leave me
    'Cause I always want you to want to be beside me
    If you are serious about "US"...
    I'd like to seal my future with thee!

    Words are not enough to convey what I wish to tell you but with your green pen-
    I still wrote this poetry!
    If you ask me now what makes me upset...
    I just might tell you and of this burden become free!

    But I don't tell you these things because then
    You'll be the one to carry this burden.
    So I will keep silent... I'll bide my time
    And wish mutely for our love to strengthen!




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      Nicely put, and in a manner easily understood, it really does all become a bit confussing sometimes huh? but I did thoroughlly enjoy this.
    | Posted on 2008-01-01 00:00:00 | by forfila | [ Reply to This ]
      I really liked it. I understand completely what you are saying. Sometimes I feel the same way. Hard for me to open up to people and express what I'm feeling. I really wouldn't have done anything differently. But really, when you are being difficult is probably the times when you are loving them the most and you just can't understand how someone as wonderful as them loves me.
    | Posted on 2008-01-01 00:00:00 | by Draumrkopa | [ Reply to This ]
      OI!I read it...i felt it..i heard it..loved it.i could picture u sitting in front of me and telling me all this...its so YOU!Green pen...green jumper...green feelings of depression..and evergreen smile of yours:)
    Its a poem conveying feelings
    Its feelings conveying a poem
    Its words meant for me
    Its me I find in the words
    I'll wait while you take your time
    To tell me what i need to hear...
    And i promise to listen..
    And I wish mutely for our love to strengthen.
    | Posted on 2008-01-01 00:00:00 | by N0shin | [ Reply to This ]


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