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Fuck a weekend trist

Author: robertbwell
ASL Info:    23/m/Wyoming
Elite Ratio:    3 - 92 /150 /75
Words: 256
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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Fuck a weekend trist

And we can have our other city and the bed we used to lie
We can have our little secret and hope for nothing else, but why?
Is it the distance or the secret, that keeps you looking down
With my hand on your face about to leave this town
Well you gave me a night and I gave you my name
At three thousand miles, will the memories remain
White sheets and bare skin, warm breath and your hair
Your eyes and my hands, beneath your underwear
Your picture says it all with that smirk you wear with pride
So confident in all it takes, the devilish things that it hides
And I look with fear that I will never be the same
Once my eyes get caught in the trap that is your name
Always gazing upon you, everything else out of focus
Not another will they see clearly, I know you had always planned this
And as I sit here, a mere 3000 miles away
My clothes still grasp your scent and I taste your kiss’s decay
So lonely is it to hold, unable to let go
So many things I want from you, that I want for you to show
But a secret set in stone will never be spoken
A secret kept between lips, both touching and partly open
Must never be more than a weekend in Austin
Where I thought I had all the right words, but the weekend ended and I lost them

Submitted on 2008-01-01 10:40:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Loved it. I couldn't wait to get to the end. I wanted to know what happened next. My heart was broken by the end. Hmmm. I guess I'm just commenting random thoughts. was sad and the only negative thing I have to say is that I agree with T.Redd about the title. I found it to be misleading. Great read/write.
| Posted on 2008-01-02 00:00:00 | by Draumrkopa | [ Reply to This ]
  This one was a good one! i enjoyed it.
It kept me reading, almost like a lost hopeful.
I wasn't to keen on the title, just a pointer, it coud have been "More than a forggoten fling", or something to that nature. Although i'm not the rhyming type it least was consistant and it flowed with antisapation. Oh your emotional description was really was off the hook.
Good Work.
Peace.. T.Redd
| Posted on 2008-01-01 00:00:00 | by T.Redd | [ Reply to This ]

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