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    dots Submission Name: Fuck a weekend tristdots
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    Author: robertbwell
    ASL Info:    23/m/Wyoming
    Elite Ratio:    3 - 92/150/75
    Words: 256
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 767
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsFuck a weekend tristdots
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    And we can have our other city and the bed we used to lie
    We can have our little secret and hope for nothing else, but why?
    Is it the distance or the secret, that keeps you looking down
    With my hand on your face about to leave this town
    Well you gave me a night and I gave you my name
    At three thousand miles, will the memories remain
    White sheets and bare skin, warm breath and your hair
    Your eyes and my hands, beneath your underwear
    Your picture says it all with that smirk you wear with pride
    So confident in all it takes, the devilish things that it hides
    And I look with fear that I will never be the same
    Once my eyes get caught in the trap that is your name
    Always gazing upon you, everything else out of focus
    Not another will they see clearly, I know you had always planned this
    And as I sit here, a mere 3000 miles away
    My clothes still grasp your scent and I taste your kissís decay
    So lonely is it to hold, unable to let go
    So many things I want from you, that I want for you to show
    But a secret set in stone will never be spoken
    A secret kept between lips, both touching and partly open
    Must never be more than a weekend in Austin
    Where I thought I had all the right words, but the weekend ended and I lost them





    Submitted on 2008-01-01 10:40:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Loved it. I couldn't wait to get to the end. I wanted to know what happened next. My heart was broken by the end. Hmmm. I guess I'm just commenting random thoughts. Anyhoo...it was sad and the only negative thing I have to say is that I agree with T.Redd about the title. I found it to be misleading. Great read/write.
    | Posted on 2008-01-02 00:00:00 | by Draumrkopa | [ Reply to This ]
      This one was a good one! i enjoyed it.
    It kept me reading, almost like a lost hopeful.
    I wasn't to keen on the title, just a pointer, it coud have been "More than a forggoten fling", or something to that nature. Although i'm not the rhyming type it least was consistant and it flowed with antisapation. Oh your emotional description was really was off the hook.
    Good Work.
    Peace.. T.Redd
    | Posted on 2008-01-01 00:00:00 | by T.Redd | [ Reply to This ]


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