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Young love

Author: xaingua
ASL Info:    16/Female/A quiet place
Elite Ratio:    2.39 - 11 /9 /11
Words: 128
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Young love

Hush for a second I can't remember
If I rejoiced on that day in december
When that 17th birthday came
And I knew nothing would be the same.

Our elders said "Now love can fall onto you."
Then I realized my dreams being untrue
You want a girl to stand in front of
I want a man to stand beside of

Right now I'm in pieces and falling apart
I wanting your arms but I don't want your heart.
I wish your hands were touching mine
But if we're together nothings alright

Can I just run or do I simply hide
I can't say in words what I'm feeling inside
How do I say I'm shaking with fear
And I don't feel completed here

Submitted on 2008-01-01 21:38:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Take your time, acting rash is silly in my eye. Thats the same for dudes to, let the heart feel, touch is nothing but a show created to continue the story, don't fear your secrets if you have them. hang around, you will find your partner one day. and that other you speak of, well he may well see that friendship is mutually more benificial than a love that puts touch before the heart.

This write is good honesty, I commend you for not runnng
| Posted on 2008-01-02 00:00:00 | by forfila | [ Reply to This ]

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