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    dots Submission Name: Madhatterdots
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    Author: Jakirina
    ASL Info:    19/F/WI
    Elite Ratio:    3.69 - 216/200/80
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
    Total Views: 690
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 775



    Description:
       The Italian sonnet. WOO!

    With slant rhyme!


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    dotsMadhatterdots
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    Mercury,
         I should have known once your steel
    grey eyes tore your silent perfume into
    my ever avid mind, what you had been
    intending. You made my flesh weep and spew
    glistening trails of black-scarlet, that which
    I took and fed you in your cup of tea,
    only to deceive and drown you along with
    me. I craved you, breathed you in, you the Queen

    of my pulsing fervor. I watched the satin,
    bunched at your throat, stain as you drank deeply.
    The White Hare hung his chin by your shoulder,
    slowly licking a dark drop from your cheek, if
    he is ever to do more Iíll take his head slowly,
    for his has no price such as mine. Madhatter.




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