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Hypocrisy


Author: N0shin
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Words: 175
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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It refers to an anecdote of my life.I can really relate to it.


Hypocrisy



Let the sun set
while I go find that mother
Clutching her unkempt child
holding their grubby hands together.
Hypocrisy at its best;
Haven't I loathed her touch
When she beseeched some alms?
I need to find her again
for I've felt like an inferior being
while i reached out to drop a coin
on that dented platter;
And you caressed that child's stained cheeks;
You smiled;
The child smiled back.
I could neither touch nor hold
I couldn't smile
For I have set my boundaries
For you are a better being;
And because I have proved,yet again
Hypocrisy at its best.
I need to find that mother
I need to hold that child
I need to prove a point
I need God to set the sun
So that darkness embraces me
Albeit no one would recognize me;
I need to set my soul free
Of the guilt
Of the remorse
I need to set off in the dark
Like a shadow
To prove a point.
All over again,
Its hypocrisy at its best.




Submitted on 2008-01-02 01:30:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  this incident flashes in my eyes...but do u know what is the thing i remember the clearest about those 30 secs....
u staring at me when i did that... wont forget that feeling like i am being noticed by someone like u... someone worth ,at the moment, living for!

u did a great work putting those 45secs into a great piece of poetry....
i just don't like the part where u blame urself
(I need to set my soul free
Of the guilt
Of the remorse
I need to set off in the dark
Like a shadow)
.... coz it is nothing to blame oneself for is it?

| Posted on 2008-01-02 00:00:00 | by obaid | [ Reply to This ]
  Awww. It sounds so sad and desolate. I love the emotion behind it. I hope that's not all of your life. I hope you have had many happy times. Really. I loved it.
| Posted on 2008-01-02 00:00:00 | by Draumrkopa | [ Reply to This ]


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