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Author: N0shin
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That's how i feel about things that u always wanted to do..Don't needs to feel,taste,touch life.


Sad how you breathe;
Sad how you smile;
I sense your perfect circle.
So close your eyes when you walk
Doesn’t matter if you cry or talk
Honey you must know;
We’ll live once
And life must be rocking.

Count the seconds
Count the crystals
I call for a dance with you
I need to do the moves
to and fro;
Hip to hip;

Put on that luscious smile
Don’t sing, don’t grieve
Time to get bolder;
Time to swing faster;
Look beyond innocence
Walls tremor;
Tongues talk;
Can’t stop
For life’s got to be rocking.

How I savor life.
The way you love.
We need to get going
We need to keep moving
We’ve got to break your soul;
To fly.

When all is shattered and broken;
When all your tears dry;
You need to find me;
You need to keep on searching;
You’ve got to learn;
Life must be rocking.

Submitted on 2008-01-02 05:59:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  "When all is shattered and broken;
When all your tears dry;
You need to find me;"

-today I did find yeh, sweetheart! when my tears had dried and everything around me was truly shattered and broken.
eveytime i read this poem of urs i feel alive and my sorrows and grief seem to wither away... and most of all i feel like i cud smile for you!

u are a true genius at work with ur poetry... keep 'em coming...and "KEEP UP THE GREAT WORK"!

-luv yeh

| Posted on 2008-01-02 00:00:00 | by obaid | [ Reply to This ]

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