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Story Of My Life

Author: kession
ASL Info:    18~M~ok
Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 115 /156 /63
Words: 245
Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
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this is just a poem i wrote about someone. i cant say who it is cause it might make some people who know me mad. enjoy.

Story Of My Life

My heart is like
an open book,
waiting to
be written.

So many pages
full of text,
so many left unprinted.

It's a book,
of never ending stories,
pages upon pages filled,
with good and bad memories.

Learning these stories,
could tell you a lot,
without me ever having
to make a sound.

Some are about you,
and how you make me feel,
others are just thoughts of you,
ones that aren't real.

I wish I could make a movie,
so you could watch it all unfold,
I wish you wouldn't warm my heart up,
and then crush it with the cold.

From day one,
you've been one of my best memories,
and after it was too late,
I realized that you're a bit of a tease.

I wish it didn't have to be this way,
I wish we could be something more,
I wish you wouldn't leave my heart,
battered and broken on the floor.

I wish you would help me write a story,
one with a happy ending,
one where we are more than friends,
one where you're standing beside me.

My book will continue to be written,
stories will continue to be told,
until the day every page is full,
until the day I grow old.

You will always be in my book,
whether it's good or bad,
because you are always in my head,
and always will be until I'm dead.

Submitted on 2008-01-02 20:51:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  this is soo cute! i love it! <3
| Posted on 2008-01-09 00:00:00 | by justkillme08 | [ Reply to This ]
  This poem was Ok.
It had emotion but it wasn't very clear.
It was kind of jumbled around.
Maybe try making it more organized.
It made em feel sad and like i just wanted to reach out and hold your hand and help you out.
I've wrote alot like this with the breaking of my heart and such it wasn't very original and thwere wasn't much that stuck out to me.

My favorite part tho was :
"I wish you would help me write a story,
one with a happy ending,"

Because ususally its just stop hurting me, but this says help me to be better and have a better memorie of you.
I liked it.

Keep it up :]
i hope to see more :D

| Posted on 2008-01-02 00:00:00 | by Suicidalchild51 | [ Reply to This ]

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