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    dots Submission Name: ECHOdots

    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       love you eric

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    Distant voice
    World outside reseeds
    Falls away slowly
    Like the sun sets
    It is all swallowed by the darkness
    And I am left
    A simple child crawling to a corner
    Waiting for it to catch up with me
    Even he disappears
    then in a moment there is color
    purple vibrant light
    His arms become elusive
    But I know heis here
    I am here
    The rest is just over imagination
    The product of eyes that are too young
    A mind far too old
    I am really safe here wrapped in his love

    Submitted on 2008-01-02 20:52:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hey hi this was a good post the image you paint in the words to me is very good

    all the best in 08

    | Posted on 2008-01-03 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]

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