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    dots Submission Name: THINKING ABOUT THE INEVITABLEdots
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    Author: obaid
    ASL Info:    21/M/Gauntlet
    Elite Ratio:    4.52 - 148/93/34
    Words: 297
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 937
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1850



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       Tears...sorrow...grief...questions...scars...silence!


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    dotsTHINKING ABOUT THE INEVITABLEdots
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    You want to leave me because you think that-
    You are about to die.
    It is you for me or no one else...'cause
    I'm tied to you- to untie me please don't try!

    Inevitably, life is going to be hard
    When I'm alone and you are gone.
    But I'll love you till the end and I'll be there...
    To kiss you as the sun rises...every single morn'.

    In my prayers...I weep...I cry.
    So that you're liberated from your sickness.
    Even on your deathbed, I shall smile for you...
    Smile like I am brimming with happiness.

    I know you treasure my smile...
    You watch me smiling and you forget to blink!
    To smile always- I shall try my best...
    Even when grief pushes me to a tearful brink!

    If you die and you leave me...I know I will hurt!
    I know I'll be a changed man!
    I don't want our love to end now...
    No, not now; 'cause it just began!

    Just believe that I shall love you
    Even when you are gone...
    The times we have been together shall play...
    In my head...they will play on an on.

    Know that I love you more than any body else
    So before you go... I want to prove it to you!
    Believe me when I say I want you forever and...
    Want to tie the knot with you!

    Never believed in words like-
    "Made for each other" , "Destined to be" -
    Until you came along and illuminated my life...
    Watered a lifeless tree!

    I don't know what the future holds for us...
    But I sure hope that you are in it...
    As for the present...lets weave our souls together..
    So that if YOUR soul departs...it takes MINE with it!




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    ||| Comments |||
      The poetry made me cry...u achieved a poet's ultimate goal...other than that..i wanna say...Thank you...it's beautiful..reminds me of one of my favourite songs..."just because you walk away it doesn't mean the end...everytime i close my eyes we fall in love again."
    No one has ever done this for me...i don't know how to thank u...the words...the feelings..are really something to live for...
    U've been wonderful...and if i die...i'll always come back...whenever you smile....
    | Posted on 2008-01-03 00:00:00 | by N0shin | [ Reply to This ]


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