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a heart like mine

Author: AngelinDisguise
ASL Info:    23/F/AUS
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Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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i haven't written in so long
this is just something i came up with
please tell me your thoughts

a heart like mine

watch my heart break tonight
as i lay down my fears and fight
listen to the words i speak
for one day its your eyes that weep
once were lovers now just friends
you think my broken heart will mend
you think you can appologise
and things will better by the next daylight
everyone suffers a broken heart
whether it consumes them is the question

do i let my mind be controlled
by a love that once new nothing wrong
do i give in to this lustful temptation
prepare my heart for what the future holds
do i hide in the shadows
as no one will remember i exsist
or do i show that hearts may mend
and prove that a broken heart
is no end

all the choices my mind once made
but im still sitting here telling you today
a broken heart may sting and burn
but a broken heart will help you learn
for life is full of ups and downs
mistakes are made smiles turn to frowns
dont give up if you truly believe
because miracles do happen
they happend to me

i found a guy who's love is pure
the one who gave my heart its cure
a guy who has a gentle touch
and lips that make any girl lust
eyes in which will never lie
a heart once broken a heart like mine

Submitted on 2008-01-03 08:54:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i like this poem i hope one day i can have an ending like that
| Posted on 2008-01-07 00:00:00 | by BlackBloodDrop | [ Reply to This ]

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