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    dots Submission Name: a heart like minedots

    Author: AngelinDisguise
    ASL Info:    23/F/AUS
    Elite Ratio:    2.23 - 133/171/100
    Words: 235
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsa heart like minedots

    watch my heart break tonight
    as i lay down my fears and fight
    listen to the words i speak
    for one day its your eyes that weep
    once were lovers now just friends
    you think my broken heart will mend
    you think you can appologise
    and things will better by the next daylight
    everyone suffers a broken heart
    whether it consumes them is the question

    do i let my mind be controlled
    by a love that once new nothing wrong
    do i give in to this lustful temptation
    prepare my heart for what the future holds
    do i hide in the shadows
    as no one will remember i exsist
    or do i show that hearts may mend
    and prove that a broken heart
    is no end

    all the choices my mind once made
    but im still sitting here telling you today
    a broken heart may sting and burn
    but a broken heart will help you learn
    for life is full of ups and downs
    mistakes are made smiles turn to frowns
    dont give up if you truly believe
    because miracles do happen
    they happend to me

    i found a guy who's love is pure
    the one who gave my heart its cure
    a guy who has a gentle touch
    and lips that make any girl lust
    eyes in which will never lie
    a heart once broken a heart like mine

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      i like this poem i hope one day i can have an ending like that
    | Posted on 2008-01-07 00:00:00 | by BlackBloodDrop | [ Reply to This ]

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