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Numb...again


Author: N0shin
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Not one of my best poems...i don't even know why im sharing it...im sure u guys would hate it as well...oh..lol..


Numb...again



I'll trade my lips for the wings of a butterfly
I need to wrap myself and hide
I start to run
When im too scared to pray,
Only to lay under that willow
So that no one can see me...
while I see you.
Im tired being deceived..
drinking poison from God's mouth.
I'm always searching for you..
for the untouched silver truth.
Im tired of being hurt
Im tired of reaching out to you
But baby now im so numb
and the kisses would barely do.
Im calling you up
But its a dead end
The phone's disconnected
And so my heart breaks
time and time
till i go numb...again.
I'm crying out for you
imprisoned in pain so blue
No one cares for me
but the dead lagoon.
At the end of the day,
I've got my face against your chest.
And the heart beats
refuse to chant my name.
I'm kneeling down
soul bleeding
Trying with all i have;
not to go numb
before i whisper
baby don't condemn me numbness...again.




Submitted on 2008-01-03 11:51:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i am sorry..really really sorry... i made u go thru this...

"And the heart beats
refuse to chant my name."

u know the above lines are not true dont u? i wud never stop loving u.... never stop breathing for u.... and my heart shall always beat ur beats....

"baby don't condemn me numbness...again."

-i promise i wont...

"the kisses would barely do. "
- u think so? well then.. mwaaah.... say that to me again now...


once again i am sorry :( do forgive me

-ob
| Posted on 2008-01-04 00:00:00 | by obaid | [ Reply to This ]


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