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    dots Submission Name: Underneath the Trembling Moondots
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    Author: metalman_21
    ASL Info:    17/m/NE
    Elite Ratio:    2.58 - 30/42/17
    Words: 220
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       This submission is actually 2 poems. The first one was written to me from my old girlfriend when we were still in love. The second one was written by me after we broke up. Enjoy


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    dotsUnderneath the Trembling Moondots
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    Two shadows dance along beneath the yellow moon tonight.
    Two hearts that beat as one like the flickering of light.
    I used to dance without him, a soul lost from before.
    Afraid to love another with a heart so strifed and sore.
    But tears run dry I realized and new tides do sweep away.
    The past that left you hopeless and the dawn of a new day.
    My dance is to a different song with him and my shadow as my guides.
    The darkness of a brand new light that i don't have to hide.
    Two shadows dance along beneath the yellow moon tonight.
    The light that burns so brightly in the darkness of the night.
    -Hadley Glaser

    The moon has faded. The dance has since faded away.
    The sun has arisen. It has formed a new day.
    On this new day comes the clouds of heartbreak.
    In the wake of this storm, the ground begins to shake.
    The dancers step back on the floor, never again to waltz.
    Never to look past the dance, and each others faults.
    Rain comes pouring down and consumes the burning flame.
    All the pain and struggle ended up in vain.
    Racked by tiredness and woe, there these dancers stand,
    never again to love, or to waltz hand in hand.
    -Chris Carpenter




    Submitted on 2004-06-26 13:44:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really like this one. The way you kinda wrote a second version, your version, to her poem. You did really good with this. Although it seems sad, its also very sweet...the emotion of replying to what she wrote. This was very discriptive and had great imagery. Great job!
    | Posted on 2004-06-26 00:00:00 | by Broken heart dies | [ Reply to This ]


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