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    dots Submission Name: Four teethdots
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    Author: N0shin
    Elite Ratio:    1.3 - 42/26/15
    Words: 416
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       For the love of my life...for my sister's daughter...for my pixie:)


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    dotsFour teethdots
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    Barely talking
    Walking wobbling;
    Utterly stubborn
    Even at the busiest hours;
    Banging at my door.
    Yet those four teeth are all it takes
    To make my day.

    Beautiful in pink;
    In red, in blue and white.
    Eyes twinkling;
    At times tears spilling.
    As messy as she could be,
    Yet those four teeth are all it takes
    To make the sun rise in glee.

    Arms reaching out;
    Wanting to be held and hugged.
    Even at times when Iím busy and fatigued,
    I could forget everything,
    Life depending on that beautiful pout.
    For I know those four teeth are all it takes
    To bring a glow on my face.

    Every time she moves with the music,
    Rejoicing and swaying;
    Every time she starts howling,
    When I walk out of the door;
    Every time she wakes up;
    Eyes wide and that sleepy smile.
    And itís magic all over again.
    It never needs any reminding;
    That those four teeth are all it takes
    For life to start all over again.

    Iíve been there when she was born;
    And Iíve been the first one to kiss those fairy cheeks;
    Iíve held her;
    Loved her;
    And I knew she needed me;
    Little did I know how much I would start needing her;
    In the course of time.
    Iíve seen her toothless;
    And Iíve seen one by one those rabbit teeth popping out;
    Until they became the fabulous four!

    She yells;
    Always demanding.
    She laughs;
    Gloating and rolling.
    Sloppy kisses, throbbing bites
    Are all I get, day and night.
    With those eyes round with amazement;
    Seeing and feeling the new world;
    I find life and love;
    Fresh with promises and cupidís arrow rain.
    If you must know, then those four teeth are all it takes,
    For the world to turn out all right.

    Beautiful pixie;
    Those four teeth of yours
    Produce the best smile on earth
    And I would do anything to ensure,
    That you grow up without any fear;
    I would want to build a fairytale bubble around you;
    That would protect you,
    Wrap you with all the love and smiles.
    But then I know that I would want you to be a fighter;
    So that you could ward off all the evil;
    So that you could help all those who need;
    And when time comes when someone is in dreadful pain;
    Baby you must know that your four teeth are all it would take;
    For life to be beautiful any day, always.




    Submitted on 2008-01-04 10:01:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is the best poetry i have read so far in like what...years n i am so glad that it is u who wrote it baby....

    if there is one person on earth who cud love you more than me it is pixie...oh wait...i already told u this before...

    it has been my pleasure to read this poetry of urs...and i loved it a lot...um 'liked it'...coz love is a word which is reserved just for u, right as is the word 'beautiful'?

    "Sloppy kisses, throbbing bites
    Are all I get, day and night."

    P.S:
    do me a favor...name one other person other than pixie who kisses u sloppily instead of thanking me for commenting on ur poetry....



    KEEP UP THE GREAT WORK...

    -OB
    | Posted on 2008-01-04 00:00:00 | by obaid | [ Reply to This ]


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