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Christmas Dream

Author: mdsouza
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.. when I awoke the next morning,
I was glad of the new year ..

(written at age 14)

Christmas Dream

Last night I was feeling downcast,
For the season of Christmas was done.
Next Christmas is a long time to wait
Now that the year's just begun.

I fell asleep to dream of angels.
My Guardian took my hand
And led me along for a lovely vigil
In a strange, holy land.

It was just like what's written in the Bible,
For a radiant star shone bright
As we entered a lowly, dreary stable
In the silent, sleepy night.

A baby lay in a manger!
A couple worn out in the cold.
But their joy and awe at their baby dear
Was just beautiful to behold.

For a moment, I gazed at Him, enraptured
As we all stood very still.
To think that I saw Lord Jesus!
It gave me a tremendous thrill!

Then, Mother Mary spoke to me,
"Your Guardian Angel said
That you were unhappy that Christmas was over
When you went to bed".

I nodded, feeling a bit queer;
Every thing that I do, He sees.
But Mother Mary drew me near
And put me at ease.

"Christmas is being grateful to Jesus
As He wants to be born in your heart.
Christmas is doing just as He pleases,
That's when all the darkness departs.

So, if you are good and faithful to Him
In your own special way,
I promise that you can celebrate Christmas
Each and every day."

So, when I awoke the next morning,
I was glad of the new year,
And decided to start it with a hug for good hearted
Mum & Dad who always fill me with cheer.

Submitted on 2008-01-04 23:45:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Marvelous sentiment, and some really great meter, especially in the fist half of the poem, bravo.... bravo.... bravo...
| Posted on 2008-03-10 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
  Hey, this is a beautiful verse Megan. I love how the essence and the description interpenetrate.

This is a fave for sure, i will like to remember the holy message forever.
| Posted on 2008-01-26 00:00:00 | by Parul garg | [ Reply to This ]
  A belated well done Megan. It reads great and it flows beautifully.

It is making me look forward to next Xmas already !!!

well done.

| Posted on 2008-01-25 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
  Megan, I'm sorry I that I missed this precious story during the Christmas Holidays! So here's a belated comment on this touching and excellent piece! I hope your holiday season was good, and here's wishing you much luck in the emerging new year!
| Posted on 2008-01-20 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
  Bravo Megan!!! This piece is deserving of more than praise - I know you can get it published - if not as your own CHRISTmas card of true cheer!!!

I haven't been on in a bit and each piece I've come across tonight is of special meaning to me and a light upon my path.

I can only say, many gracious thanks and keep on keepin on girl! Your light shines brightly!!!

love,peace,joy,abundance & many special smiles to share

| Posted on 2008-01-15 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
  You truly captured the spirit of Christmas in this lovely write! Yes, you can celebrate the joy and wonder of the Christ child each and every day. I hope 2008 will be a wonderful year for you! :-) Sharon
| Posted on 2008-01-08 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]

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