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    dots Submission Name: True Ownerdots

    Author: Localfreak
    ASL Info:    37, Maybe, Here
    Elite Ratio:    5.37 - 131/123/76
    Words: 146
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 877
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 861

       An old piece of mine I wrote for a friend.
    The only Iambic poem I ever wrote and only because I was asked.
    Hope somebody else likes it too

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    dotsTrue Ownerdots

    And they fought for their lives as the walls tumbled down
    As the rubble fell down to the earth
    And the cold winters gale blew through each every man
    With the vengeance of nature unfurled

    Still they stood and they held and they charged over ground
    That was littered with comrades were felled
    Till they came to the copse, to the enemies post
    With an army of vengeance in tow

    But we know all the tales for as history has told
    That the brave of the north are no more
    For where once was a castle with walls standing tall
    There is now just a burned out shell

    So befly all your fears of the conquerors name
    For the conquerors fell where you stand
    Within this fair forest by the hands of your kin
    By the true owner of this fair land

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      I could never do this. Create iambic pentameter? yes. Create iambic pentameter and have the poem make sense? absolutely not. You never cease to amaze me. I love how the descriptions jump out and how the reader is given a vivid picture. A chance to see the past in the present. I do have to ask why the name of the poem is "True Owner". I feel like I missed something, is there something implied in the last stanza/title that is going completely over my head, or am I reading too much into it?
    | Posted on 2008-02-29 00:00:00 | by inkonspikuous | [ Reply to This ]
      A good story and very good use of words, that is - moving on so as not to over use any particular one but show a variety. This gift is absent from many works.

    I do ask, however, what does "befly" mean?
    | Posted on 2008-01-05 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]

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