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    dots Submission Name: heavens dreamdots

    Author: XxMusikJunkiexX
    ASL Info:    18/f/ny
    Elite Ratio:    2.85 - 109/134/39
    Words: 262
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       ionno where this came from but... :shrug:

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    dotsheavens dreamdots

    In my dreams I caught a glimpse of heaven,
    An angel stood by the pearly gates,
    His wings shimmered like the summer stars,
    His presence held peace that radiate,
    In my dreams I saw him hiding,
    I suppose even angels are scared to fall,
    He stood where the heavens joined with the sky,
    And wondered if anyone could hear him call,
    In my dreams he lifted his hands to pray,
    Let his head fall like a weeping child,
    He closed his eyes for a fleeting second,
    Though he trembled all the while,
    Tears flowed from the shadows his eyes cast down,
    I didn’t know angels could really cry,
    In this moment I saw the world weep to,
    And heard the desperateness in his lies,
    He opened his mouth as if to speak,
    But instead he sung a song without any words,
    He fell to his knees and threw back his head,
    And let out his pain from reserve,
    In my dreams he listened to them speak hollow phrases,
    Watched the world crumble without his consent,
    His tears flowed freely from the back of his mind,
    I guess there was nothing he had to fight against,
    In my dreams he clutched a golden dagger,
    It sparkled in the light of Heaven,
    And with one quick movement he cut his wings,
    He smiled as they hung beside him broken,
    In my dreams he threw off his bloodied wings,
    Like the chains sinners are bound to in Hell,
    In my dreams he jumped from Heavens gates,
    And I swear, he was laughing as he fell…

    Submitted on 2004-06-26 15:29:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I understand the story behind this piece perfectly, and I for one don't mind if I don't know the inspiration. The language, flow and overall image are enough for my mind of feed on for a long time. Excellent write!
    | Posted on 2004-06-26 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]
      lol i have no idea what inspired this piece, i didnt know where it was going.. i woke up late last night with the beginning in my head, and the falling angel was just an idea i had while writing this piece... i guess i was thinking of an angel watching down on our chaotic world, and how its so screwed up, and wanting to change that...
    | Posted on 2004-06-26 00:00:00 | by XxMusikJunkiexX | [ Reply to This ]
      well, gee, i dunno what to think now. i felt bad for this angel, crying and being afraid to fall. i was feeling perhaps that he was disillusioned with the world below... i was shocked when he cut his own wings off! what's that about?! i'm not sure. i think you lost me at the end. maybe you could explain.
    | Posted on 2004-06-26 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]

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