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    dots Submission Name: Insomnia (Until I'm 18)dots
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    Author: dismal_s child
    ASL Info:    18/F/On A Carousel
    Elite Ratio:    3.21 - 440/401/163
    Words: 159
    Class/Type: Prose/Serious
    Total Views: 651
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    dotsInsomnia (Until I'm 18)dots
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    God why am I so cold?

    If you suposedly have my soul.

    And why am I numb?

    Seen too much to be 17 years old?

    I've seen you never answer me.

    After years of being on my knees.



    Daisy Chains and Razor blades

    gauze to stop my bleeding home.
    When will I give up? Gotta Give up or Give in...
    AA is for quitters.


    I hope my future includes me. Now they know they've lost me. this House can't be my home. There's blood on the walls. There's guilt under our Christmas tree.


    Empty. And. Angry. I stand opposing you. I'm losing it all. You've thrown it away. You've thrown my lifes work in my face. And I'm not backing down, As my insecurities are hurled past me. I am your scapegoat. God's Forgotten Middle Child. The accident you haven't forgiven yourself for. Hypocrite.




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      I really like this, I'm not really sure why. There are parts where I'm like, "What the [censored]?"
    But my favorite parts are--

    "Seen too much to be 17 years old?

    I've seen you never answer me.

    After years of being on my knees"

    &&

    "gauze to stop my bleeding home"

    Love that gauze line.
    | Posted on 2008-01-05 00:00:00 | by No_purpose | [ Reply to This ]


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