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Simple Delights

Author: tennisfuzz
ASL Info:    21/F/wandering.
Elite Ratio:    5.72 - 79 /98 /40
Words: 25
Class/Type: Haiku /Comedy
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Average Vote:    5.0000
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It's fun. And really good chap-stick....

Simple Delights

Yum, mango chap-stick,
Makes lips delicious and fresh.
Smelling like sunshine.

Submitted on 2008-01-05 12:57:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Hah, simple, not a whole lot of inner meaning, but light, kind of makes things go away for a few seconds.

Things like this make me smile
| Posted on 2008-01-06 00:00:00 | by Imadjinn | [ Reply to This ]
  A good haiku.
I especially like 'smelling like sunshine'...since it makes one think about the senses with a bit of a twist.
Nicely done.
| Posted on 2008-01-06 00:00:00 | by latentlylyrical | [ Reply to This ]
  Simple pleasures are among the best pleasures ever. The things that get you by when you're feeling down. And mango chap-stick, well that sounds like something I'll be buying next time I go to Wal-Mart. I love the smell and taste of mango. Though I wouldn't eat the chap-stick.
| Posted on 2008-01-05 00:00:00 | by Caity | [ Reply to This ]
  I'll have to try some now. I don't do chap-stick, but I like mango.
| Posted on 2008-01-05 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]

Awesome, amazing, Mangoreffic. I really really want a mango, or least to put some chapstick on. Great Haiku yet again, be proud. I can honestly say, best Haiku about mango chapstick ever!

| Posted on 2008-01-05 00:00:00 | by Mykquillion | [ Reply to This ]

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