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    dots Submission Name: The Demon Salesmandots

    Author: No_purpose
    ASL Info:    17 | Vag. | Pallet Town
    Elite Ratio:    3.64 - 63/47/21
    Words: 207
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
    Total Views: 901
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1459

       Yeah, so pretty much this is what I see inside meh little head. //: Demonic circus runner, trying to get someone to join their little circus.. Tricks them, they get fucked and get sent to hell. :] Yup.

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    dotsThe Demon Salesmandots


    Hey there, hello, and how do you do?
    I've got a proposition just waiting for you!
    Just come on, sign on, here's your cue
    And join my rag-tag, amazing zoo!

    I've got every toy for destruction,
    and people from alien abduction!
    Just a small moral deduction,
    to join my electrifying production!

    It's sure to astound!
    Ignoring any rule in a single bound!
    Just keep sticking around,
    and your approval will be sound.

    The small side effect,
    Is, with all due respect,
    something we can neglect,
    and no doubt reject.

    Because it's all here and now!
    The fun to come I avow!
    This job is a cash cow,
    and one only I will allow.

    So what do you say?
    Only once you have to pay,
    but this offer's only today!
    So don't you dare delay!

    Great, wonderful, amazing!
    Your choice is worth praising!
    And your eyes are blazing,
    I can see you're done appraising.

    So here it is, here's your prize!
    One that none would advise,
    but we've blinded your eyes,
    with our demonic desguise.

    A one way ticket to hell!
    It's bound to be swell,
    a story none can retell.
    This means it's my curtain call, farewell.

    Submitted on 2008-01-05 13:16:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like this so much! The rhyming is fantastic. Though I think I spent more time looking at the rhyme then understanding the poem. It was nice either way, very creative. I've never read a poem like this that's for sure. Nice visuals. I think I understood what it was about. A demon that sold stuff at his store, when you bought something you would go to hell(or/and be a little morally degraded?) It was really cool, I liked it a lot. Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2008-01-21 00:00:00 | by emoxday | [ Reply to This ]

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