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    dots Submission Name: My Saviordots
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    Author: Savannah Cullen
    Elite Ratio:    1.66 - 9/37/48
    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsMy Saviordots
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    I turned around in surprise
    A blue van
    Headed right towards me
    It would be my demise
    He left his spot in the crowd
    Faster than human legs would allow
    Knocking me out of the way
    And as he made his resolve
    It did not sway
    The blue van returned
    And the floor was so cold it burned
    As it came screeching to a halt
    Battered and broken
    I knew what I could call him for the moment
    My savior




    Submitted on 2008-01-05 16:34:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      mmm that was a rush! I love it! It happens so quick, yet so slow & it's almost like: wow, did that really just happen?

    A+ for capturing a feeling
    | Posted on 2008-01-07 00:00:00 | by Mark Huntsman | [ Reply to This ]


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