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    dots Submission Name: No Talking Alloweddots
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    Author: Savannah Cullen
    Elite Ratio:    1.66 - 9/37/48
    Words: 113
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 885
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsNo Talking Alloweddots
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    Colors
    Colors
    Everywhere
    yet here I sit
    Without a care
    Bored
    Out of my mind
    Writing this
    To pass the time
    Just writing
    Line by line
    These colors are so inviting
    But still my legs don't move
    Trying to interperet the artists thoughts
    Like music on a score
    Their paintings are so brave and true
    Like a soldier off to war
    Why must they torture us so
    This thing we call an association
    They think that we're gaining knowledge
    When in reality it's deprivation
    Less and less our minds will learn
    As the pages of our books turn
    I yawn and look around
    I must stay silent
    Without a sound
    No talking allowed




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