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Its all about love

Author: caspian
ASL Info:    23/m/Denmark
Elite Ratio:    2.31 - 134 /189 /57
Words: 81
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Its all about love

Snow is falling all around me
like a final gasp of breath from
the violated sky
I imagine you beside me
silent warm and frail
like a sunbeam in the shade
always changing always pale
Hearts are beating loud and clear
"its the world thats changing"
so they say

Hands are trembling as they climb
underneath the covers
Tears are freezing in the corners
of your eyes as we say our last

Submitted on 2008-01-05 18:59:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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