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    dots Submission Name: Worthless Wordsdots
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    Author: _winky_
    ASL Info:    25/f/minnesota
    Elite Ratio:    4.32 - 664/527/95
    Words: 119
    Class/Type: Poetry/What you did
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    Maybe I try to hard
    Just to keep in touch
    Or say to often
    I miss you so much
    I thought things were cool
    Our friendship on wings
    Now I crash land
    Into a pit of sharp things
    To sit here and bleed
    Has become my long day
    Laying with dry tears
    Waiting to decay
    Tossed back and fourth
    Hitting every acute tip
    When I think you are done
    You yank me and I rip
    My wound just grows wider
    But scars are hidden deep
    I made a promise to myself
    You’ll never see me weep
    Walk away from me please
    You can bring me no joy
    I refuse to let myself be
    To you, another play toy




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      Nice write. Definetly one I keep to remember to help me through lifel to never be a play toy or let them see me cry.
    There arent even parts to pick out as my favorite, the entire poem is my favorite.
    I love it. It shows the sadness and pain, but it also keeps you strong and smart to keep on.
    | Posted on 2008-01-08 00:00:00 | by dreamer37517 | [ Reply to This ]


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