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Author: N0shin
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Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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For my baby


Home



On the horizon
Near the sun set
In the eyes of my window;
Every shadow that passes by,
I search for you.
Lost in the meadows;
On your way to the rainbows;
Vouching yet another dream for me;
Ever beautiful, ever lasting.
Yellow daisies;
Olive fairies;
Unnamed feelings;
Baby I'm waiting for you.
Agitated, exhausted, arms open wide;
Born for you, yet destined to die in your arms.
You need to come back...home.




Submitted on 2008-01-06 12:34:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  do u know what "home" is for me baby?

Home is ur lap on which my head can lie
When i am happy...sad...
Disappointed...even when i am about to die.

This is a home better than the best of homes...
Coz its doors are always open...
I wish to live in it...it's a dream...turn into reality...
i wish that cud happen.

If there is any place i want to breath my last breaths in.
Then it shall be in this humble abode...
Coz no matter what...this home always welcomes me...
And u stand at the doorstep...welcoming me aboard!



THANKS FOR SUCH A BEAUTIFUL POETRY BABY...I LOVE ALL THAT U HAVE DONE FOR ME AND ALL THAT U DO FOR ME...U MAKE ME FEEL SO SPECIAL AND WANTED!
THANX A LOT...

-OB
| Posted on 2008-01-06 00:00:00 | by obaid | [ Reply to This ]


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