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    dots Submission Name: ¤ Dementium ¤dots
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    Author: Porcelaine
    ASL Info:    21/F/Croatia
    Elite Ratio:    3.83 - 850/651/234
    Words: 197
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dots¤ Dementium ¤dots
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    I bleed like a ghost, yes, and all the hungry come to stare,
    To wait to see the death of a million stars
    In the vacant corners of my mind - the gaping universe;
    One more to wither down for me,
    One more lit bright for them…

    ''There shall be no visitors tonight
    And the heart will not be aching
    For departures into the abysses of life'' -
    I hear them whisper in the gloom of their choir
    As all the seas turn knee deep and shy away.

    ''Who was this master of yours? Who was it
    That left you like a bleeding parody for a vampire audience?
    Should you not be clawing your way out, little trinket?
    Clawing into retribution?'' -
    How easy to say when you know how to feel...and despair!

    ''Let it be known that I have nested on this ground a thunderstorm.
    A song more deviant then the marks of your imprints,
    More delirious then your growling stomachs
    And I have nothing to lose!'' – I growl.
    More is left of me then they can tell… lethally more…

    And I am NOT the victim tonight.





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    ||| Comments |||
      I'm confused...

    I mean, the poem is excellent. I love every bit of it. I can see a dying victim surrounding by...carnivorous scavengers...and lots of gloom and stuff. But somehow I am left mystified and confused by it.

    Your poetry is definitely not for the weak of words. This is pretty. I should make an abstract piece based on this. Just you watch!

    Haha! Art!
    | Posted on 2008-01-18 00:00:00 | by AsiaticFox | [ Reply to This ]
      I absolutely adore every line, the way everything is phrased. I think that the bit where it says, "....vampire audience?" could be changed to "...vampiric audience?"
    It seems to flow, or fit better, to me.

    Good poem, I'm definitely going to read some more by you.
    | Posted on 2008-01-06 00:00:00 | by No_purpose | [ Reply to This ]


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