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    dots Submission Name: oceansdots
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    Author: austin
    ASL Info:    22/ Male/ Odessa, Texas
    Elite Ratio:    4.41 - 376/396/84
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 773
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 758



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    dotsoceansdots
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    never care, never fear
    insight never far from obscurity
    and as far from anything solid
    dissolving from six feet down

    stimulus no longer positive
    now requires more than usual
    the healthy median just sliding,
    further into irrational extremes

    So guide me to the oceans,
    guide to the seas
    fly me to forever
    give me reason to believe

    the will to be something more
    and have the grit to push forward
    is something worthy of appraise
    but the pressures of a landslide
    discovering it's all a phase

    So guide me to the oceans
    guide me to the sea
    fly me to forever
    and give me reason to believe.




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      wow. this is powerful, and would be even more so as spoken word. Have you ever considered going to beat bars? cafes and bars where they have open mic nights and you can recite your poety for the drunk and adoring masses?

    the rhythm and flow here is spectacular, the way you keep going back to that one bit, without it being overly repetitive.

    "So guide me to the oceans
    guide me to the sea
    fly me to forever
    and give me reason to believe."
    I can hear this words spoken softly but with force, half whispered in the dark, the sound of waves crashing in the background, and soft sighs of longing.

    lovely
    | Posted on 2008-01-08 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]


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