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Submission Name: oceans dots

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Author:	austin
ASL Info:	22/ Male/ Odessa, Texas
Elite Ratio:	4.41 - 376/396/84
Words:	111

Class/Type:	Poetry/Serious
Total Views:	752
Average Vote:	5.0000
Bytes:	758

Description:

oceans

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never care, never fear
insight never far from obscurity
and as far from anything solid
dissolving from six feet down

stimulus no longer positive
now requires more than usual
the healthy median just sliding,
further into irrational extremes

So guide me to the oceans,
guide to the seas
fly me to forever
give me reason to believe

the will to be something more
and have the grit to push forward
is something worthy of appraise
but the pressures of a landslide
discovering it's all a phase

So guide me to the oceans
guide me to the sea
fly me to forever
and give me reason to believe.

Submitted on 2008-01-06 14:47:10 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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wow. this is powerful, and would be even more so as spoken word. Have you ever considered going to beat bars? cafes and bars where they have open mic nights and you can recite your poety for the drunk and adoring masses?

the rhythm and flow here is spectacular, the way you keep going back to that one bit, without it being overly repetitive.

"So guide me to the oceans
guide me to the sea
fly me to forever
and give me reason to believe."
I can hear this words spoken softly but with force, half whispered in the dark, the sound of waves crashing in the background, and soft sighs of longing.

lovely
| Posted on 2008-01-08 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]

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