wow. this is powerful, and would be even more so as spoken word. Have you ever considered going to beat bars? cafes and bars where they have open mic nights and you can recite your poety for the drunk and adoring masses?
the rhythm and flow here is spectacular, the way you keep going back to that one bit, without it being overly repetitive.
"So guide me to the oceans
guide me to the sea
fly me to forever
and give me reason to believe."
I can hear this words spoken softly but with force, half whispered in the dark, the sound of waves crashing in the background, and soft sighs of longing.