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Author: love gone wrong
ASL Info:    27/m/colorado
Elite Ratio:    2.14 - 337 /381 /42
Words: 64
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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this is just a little something i wrote years ago. came across it and thought id see what comments i might get


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the snow flys freely flowing
the blazing sun now only glowing
walk with me through woods of wonder
we see the trees turned to lumber
i cant bear to tear the hair from this were-
wolf, running smart, cunning, do you care?
i do. who too will walk with me and you?
who cares for our beastly friend?
true friends to find are few




Submitted on 2004-02-05 16:47:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is great imagery and insight no matter how long ago it was written... carries and holds a strong message especially with 'who cares for our beastly friend'... nice one (just looking back through people's older stuff that I havent seen and returning comments
| Posted on 2004-03-05 00:00:00 | by Crash | [ Reply to This ]
  It should be "flies" in the first line. Nice to see something from the bestial perspective, but I agree that you need a title.
| Posted on 2004-02-06 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
  like the alliteration and onomatepia in this almost gets to the point of being tongue twisting but not quite. has a real pitterpatterpitterpatter feel like its trying to creep up on you but you can hear its footsteps. i agree a little fine tuning may benefit; title would be great; how about
distancedrifting....
finetuningandtweakingandshellbecooking....
www.on1eday.co.uk
| Posted on 2004-02-05 00:00:00 | by on1eday.co.uk | [ Reply to This ]
  Ummmm... ya lost me on this one. The imagery is fantastic, but the werewolf is sorta random. (Or maybe the mystical poetry nectar isn't flowing tonight... kinda tired. ) It does well in conveying the scene, however. Mountain-side woods, twilight, falling snow. Nice. <><
| Posted on 2004-02-05 00:00:00 | by WorththeWait | [ Reply to This ]


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