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    dots Submission Name: I look at youdots
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    Author: Broken-lands
    ASL Info:    14/female/here
    Elite Ratio:    2.85 - 22/38/44
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 977
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    Bytes: 619



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    dotsI look at youdots
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    ilookatyou.

    I look at you,
    i see hope.
    I look at you,
    I see my love.

    They look at us,
    they think of disgust.
    We look at them,
    we smile at their look.

    Look at me,
    I'll look at you.
    We're so different
    our love is unreal.

    I look in the dephts of my heart,
    I see that you are the one that
    pumps the blood for my heart.
    Can you see the look of dispair
    on their eyes?

    I love you,
    you are my hope.
    I love you,
    with all my heart.




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