Description: Betrayed by a friend... and then my dear girl Bee dedicated a whole day to helping me out. I think I gained more than I lost, when I thought about it, so I wrote her this song.
Well the lyrics. I wanna put notes in this one. It's a keeper, after a few editions, of course.
It's upbeat, kinda silly-sung, almost rapped but to an acoustic guitars beat. Simple chords and shet.
If you see spelling errors tell me, and also wonky sloppy rhyiming (it is 1:30 here)
Y'all who read me are well loved, I will return the comments and then some soon.
(LLWB1)
Woke up -------------------------------------------
I’ve woken up.
The sun has risen but it’s a cloudy day.
A lesson has been learned but in the hardest way.
With a cut and a bruise
Like I had something to lose - oh oh
I don’t think I wanna stay here.
I’ve woken up.
I wanna live the last day again.
Before I was aware of the debauchery
Before I learned about he sin
Back when I had you for a real friend.
A real friend. Friend. Friend.
But it’s over now,
I’ve woken up and can’t sleep any more.
You thumped me hard and now I’m broke and sore
And I don’t think I wanna stay here with that whore / in my thoughts
Sun’s up, moon’s gone down
And I’m fuckin sick of waiting around
For a friend and a brother who never was there
You’re just a sore loser, I just don’t care
So go on, Screw off, go make your own way
I’m waking up without you to bring me down
I’ve got a fine lady, got a fine friend
Already on the mend, gonna ge well
You’re just a sore loser / time to let it end
Before you drag me back to hell
Yes.
I’m outta bed.
Not gonna sleep my whole life through.
Too many folks to see and things to do.
I don’t think I’m gonna stay here with you / in my head.
In fact I honestly would rather be dead.
I’m outta bed.
Looking forward to what lies ahead.
To a life full of lovin’ and of actual friends
Who will sit and will pray and give up a whole day
Just to listen to the sad things that I have to say -hey hey
And we’ll go into town and waste all of noon
But it isn’t a waste cause it was not spent with you
They do they things God meant us all to do
Live Love Learn and Regret, Forgive and Forget, too
If I had to choose, and if I gotta gamble,
on them I would bet / a lot
And we’re gonna have fun, cause they are my family
And I wish you had one / so you could see the things that I see
What with all I’ve got
Cause when I close my eyes tonight,
I’m gonna shed a tear.
Cause I’m happier with them
Than I have been in years…
Sun’s down, moon’s come back up
Yet some how it’s bright than it was at the start.
Second stanza, fourth line, I think you meant "the" sin?
Fourth or fifth stanza, about eighth line down, is it "get" or "age" well?
Seventh stanza, third line down, "they do the things God meant us all to do" I believe was what you meant?
Last stanza, "brighter" than it was at the start?
Other than those few minor errors, this song really says a lot about how you view friendship...and those who truly are friends to you. I find myself agreeing with a lot of your concepts of a friend.
Again with the wow, Flynn. That was beautiful, and sad, inspirational, and happy in a way. Because sometimes, moving on is the only and the best thing that can be done. I congratulate you on the great work and only hope that I could write something like that someday.
Submission Name: Woke up
