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    dots Submission Name: Ya-dah-dahdots
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    Author: Flynn
    ASL Info:    24/M/MI
    Elite Ratio:    3.77 - 74/123/48
    Words: 303
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Friendship
    Total Views: 1028
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1953



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       And to my friends I will return the favor. They have done everything for me. Some you guys may even know. SanctityExposed, my favorite ESer, is included on this list. Leah, Dan, Ji, even the two Joshes to an extent. Nikki Marie, Mira B. Everyone who I trust with the covenant of a hug, I will fight for each and every day. We are in this boat together.

    Never lose sight of the hope and the light.


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    dotsYa-dah-dahdots
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    Some times.
    The rain comes down and itís like.
    Yeah.

    HavenĎt you wondered?.
    Why the rain comes down so hard.
    Why so hard?
    Youíve prayed as hard, and still it falls harder.
    Like every day.
    Yeah.

    And I see, sometimes, that light in your eyes go dim.
    I know youíre thinking.
    Stop that thinking.
    Now is time to sleep.
    Just go to sleep, itís ok to sleep.
    Iíll be here.

    I offer you the hand cause Iím your friend.
    And let that rain fall on my shoulder dear.
    Hold me close and Iíll hold you near.
    Thatís why weíre here for.
    Itís okay to cry.
    Thatís why Iím here for.
    Yeah.

    Not gonna say I know exactly how it feels
    When hell falls down upon you.
    Itís different from each view.
    And the burden itself seems a sin
    When you look at that trouble youíre in
    But this is the boat weíll both be sailin
    Till the hurricane comes through.
    When youíre tired I will row for you.

    So cast away that tattered vale
    I can see through the wool anyways.
    Let me see those watery eyes,
    And I will dry them my friend.
    Like you dried mine a million times before.
    I know and you will many more.
    The storm is gonna go through.
    And when it does Iíll be with you, singing
    A sing song sing-along tune

    Ya-dah-dah dah
    Ya-dah-dah dah dah dah
    Ya-dah-dah dah
    Ya-dah-dah dah oh yeah ah
    But thenÖ

    Iíll close my eyes as if to say
    And I do, each and every day
    That someday
    The sun will shine bright as it should be
    Itíll be a warmer day and itís like.
    Yeah.

    Sing alongÖ
    Ya-dah-dah dah
    Ya-dah-dah dah dah dah
    Ya-dah-dah dah
    Ya-dah-dah dah oh yeah ahÖ




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    ||| Comments |||
      That was amazingly deep. I heard it in my head, played upon only an acoustic guitar, until halfway through, the heartbeat of it, the drums came in.

    You have an amazing gift, Flynn, and I wish you well with finding artists to publish these works of yours that speak to one so well.

    | Posted on 2008-01-11 00:00:00 | by DemonicInk | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, this is an amazing song. I kind of hear this "indie rock" sound in my head while listening to it. I loved the way you pieced together the lyrics, and your style overall. The song takes a bit of a turn halfway through, and the cant "yeah" like lyrics, open up to bigger more complex stanza's. I assume that at the point the pace and tone of the song change as well. I really enjoy this, especially the imagery. "Let the rain fall down on my shoulder dear" and "Its ok to sleep", it tells such a touching story. I think this is getting a +fav by me lol. Also if you ever record is somehow, I'd love to hear it.
    | Posted on 2008-01-08 00:00:00 | by Passionbyapathy | [ Reply to This ]
      once again although i have never seen your work before i am impressed with it wow you are really great! For 19 you have some serious talent i hope you do something amazing with it
    | Posted on 2008-01-07 00:00:00 | by Thirst4Serenity | [ Reply to This ]
      I hope, one day, that this will be made into a song. Just like "Woke Up", it has such great potential.

    Though, eighth stanza, fourth line: "The sun will whine bright as it should be" Gotta fix it! So's it can bees perfect!

    But, on a more serious note. Amen, brother, amen. You've wiggled your way into my heart, and now I've got a heart worm. Love you, bud, and never forget that!
    | Posted on 2008-01-07 00:00:00 | by SanctityExposed | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, Flynneh. That was deep. And it made me cry. Do you mind if I send it to one of my friends? It portrays exactly what I've been feeling lately, but I just didn't know how to say it. But that's ok. You said it for me.
    | Posted on 2008-01-07 00:00:00 | by Draumrkopa | [ Reply to This ]


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