Shining radiance, gleaming and bright
Beautiful blindness brought on by this light
All evil and guilt, shadow and shame
Destroyed by beams of glorious flame
Triumphant I rise, casting out my demon
Forgetting my past, leaving a freeman
Better than the last piece you attempted, I must say. You've got a good grasp of imagery, so keep using that in your poetry.
Keep working on your stuff.
this is simple and short but it really has a meaning to it and thats suprising usually when you read a short poem you think of how much more could be said but really you used words that said it all and i like this poem and really a good piece!!
xoxoevie