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    dots Submission Name: Substance Induced Happinessdots
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    Author: Roberto Santos
    ASL Info:    18/Male/India
    Elite Ratio:    2.96 - 118/159/75
    Words: 245
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 656
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    Description:
       Sometimes we resort to various things to help us get away from our lives, from other people, from ourselves even...this poem seeks to explore this. I know of how it feels like, so this is a very frank, direct poem from me.


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    dotsSubstance Induced Happinessdots
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    Since I lack the thing I seek the most
    I raise my glass in an ironic toast
    To my muse who teases my rationale
    I dull my pain with this cheap ale.

    Yes, substance induced happiness is all I get
    They blunt the edges of memory and regret
    You may scoff at their passing sensation
    But they do provide a temporary satisfaction.

    Itís the cheap stuff that has the greatest effect
    Or at least thatís what they said when I checked
    Not used to expensive wines or any kind of drugs
    I get only the local brew in cheap, filthy mugs

    What I look for is something to make me forget
    In smoke, that sensation is not quite what you get
    They just make you comfortable with that you lack
    It doesnít quite help you to forget that fact.

    Alcohol is good because it softens your brain
    And breaks down any barriers that remain
    But I fear, my friend, that Iím way too dumb
    To be trusted when Iím comfortably numb.

    So what can I take to get some relief?
    Whatís that? I should take some of the leaf?
    Iím afraid that doesnít work so well
    When I awake itíll seem like a living hell.

    What do I do now to lessen my pain?
    Why do you stay silent, no answer remains?
    Tell me quickly, which substance to choose?
    Which of them can make me forget my muse?




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      Heh a nice poem. I also feel like that sometimes man although I tend to us Vodka when that time comes. Alcohol is good, weed is better but not when you have emotional issues. Weed tends to amplify feelings you know, so if you feel good you'll feel better but if you feel [censored]ty it will only get [censored]tier. This is agreat poem. I'll take a sip of rachiu in you honour!
    | Posted on 2008-01-08 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      It was very straight forward but very good,I have a little substance induced escape method.
    I like how you are trying to escape your muse"most embrace it",leads me to think you may be a tortured artist,if so then we have a few things in common.My favorite part was "they blunt the edges of memories and regret"This is a good read and I cant wait to dive in deeper into your work.
    thank you
    Diablo
    | Posted on 2008-01-07 00:00:00 | by Diablo Tapitio | [ Reply to This ]


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