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    dots Submission Name: I Am A Night Owl Who Hang's Out With A Vampirdots
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    Author: oononotthatguy
    ASL Info:    35 M Fernley ,Nv
    Elite Ratio:    5.14 - 48/15/15
    Words: 413
    Class/Type: Story/Comedy
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    dotsI Am A Night Owl Who Hang's Out With A Vampirdots
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    I am a Night Owl who hangs out with a
    Vampire...................Who is also a Tweeker.

    "Sooo, you kill any one lately?"

    ".........................................No."

    My head hung low I shrugged my
    shoulders and nodded.

    "Dude your skin is grey, and what's
    wrong with you? I'm gonna open up the
    Blinds and let some Moon lite in."

    In the blink of an eye the Blinds were
    closed. He was right back to where he was.
    His eyes were glazed over and Death was
    his countenance. His skin was dry, almost
    flakey. He looked up and Glared right through
    me.

    "My Friend,..................it is none of your
    business."

    "DUDE.................? Its been like, what a
    week scence you've eatin? Naaaa...........No
    wait. The Rent. I hope you've scoped out
    some rich Bitch stairrin out this windo of of
    yours....................................No wait....... I
    dont If You've Noticed. WE LIVE IN THE
    GETTO."

    His eyes turned white. He opened up
    his mouth with arrogance I had not seen
    yet. It was if I had been hit by a truck.
    he picked me up stright up in-to the Ceiling.

    "Do You Like The Way This Feels?"

    My arms spun in circles as I fell in-to the
    floor.

    I woke up in a mixture of blood and shattered glass.My eyes opened up to see
    the Rent on the tip of my noise. I was pissed,
    but not to pissed. I started to laugh.

    And there in a chair across the way, he
    was calm. With a skin color I had not seen
    in a long time. He picked me up by my shoulders and sat me down on the couch.
    I than began to talk again.

    "Like that last one..............You know I
    spent like a month trying to pick up on Her?
    You know I even kissed Her?"

    He just sat there with a peacefull Kinda
    arrogance.

    "I hope she was ugly. You always go after
    the pretty ones...................no wait........
    ooo..........oooo No You Diden't. You did it
    again you BASTARD.

    And with two fist's in the air.............
    "NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOooooooooooooooo"

    Narrator

    And there you have it a Vampire with a
    Drug problem. And a single Guy who doesan't
    like to work that much. A short story stright
    out of the getto.

    Joshua German




    Submitted on 2008-01-07 14:29:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Ok this was very close to being funny if it wasn't true.
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    | Posted on 2008-01-07 00:00:00 | by mekisha4ever | [ Reply to This ]


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