A Friendly Girl From the Bronx by Passionbyapathy

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Submission Name: A Friendly Girl From the Bronx dots

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Author:	Passionbyapathy
ASL Info:	18/M/Ohio State
Elite Ratio:	6.06 - 174/189/127
Words:	312

Class/Type:	Poetry/Friendship
Total Views:	318
Average Vote:	4.0000
Bytes:	825

Description:
Inspired by a random chat

A Friendly Girl From the Bronx dots

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I had a random chat today
With a friendly girl
From the Bronx
She talked of the way
The buildings tickled the sky
And how the runners
Ruin central park for everyone
She spoke softly
About the sheer size of it all
While looking up at the sky
From the center of Manhattan
She said she loved poetry
And that I should dedicate to her a poem
And so
I dedicate this simple poem……
To a friendly girl from the Bronx

Submitted on 2008-01-07 16:56:10 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I like this. And I understand what she means by the runners ruining central park, Having been there two weeks ago.
But I also think central park is ruined deep down. the superficial feel of it. it may be old, but only a meagre part of it is actual... the rest is buldozed as is the rest of human civilization....i am going to make a story of central park.....look..your creativity is inviting...
| Posted on 2008-05-19 00:00:00 | by KeeperOfLight | [ Reply to This ]
  It's amazing how sometimes the most random things inspire our muse.

The free verse style of this piece, as well as the climbing stepladder look, appeal to me very much.

I have to read more of your works, if it's all like this, I'm hooked!
| Posted on 2008-01-11 00:00:00 | by DemonicInk | [ Reply to This ]
  i think sometimes the best poems are the random ones, you have a thought, or just imagine some little thing or like hear ,a short conversation.and it works, no sweating over lines or rhymes for hours and hours, just tell it like it was.i thought it was like a "calm" soft poem then the line

And how the runners
Ruin central park for everyone. like i could see joggers running by interupting the quiet peaceful conversation you both were having, i like these poems short simple but sweet.
thanks for sharing
bye
ger
| Posted on 2008-01-08 00:00:00 | by eyeless in gaza | [ Reply to This ]
  I love the way you took something so simple, and made it into art. I do favor this poem, it's very nonchalant but upbeat. I also love free verse, so this is def. marked as a favorite!
| Posted on 2008-01-08 00:00:00 | by SanctityExposed | [ Reply to This ]
  Awww. Wish someone would dedicate a poem/song to me...anyhoo, it was beautiful and simply put. Great Job!

Duv
| Posted on 2008-01-07 00:00:00 | by Draumrkopa | [ Reply to This ]

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