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    dots Submission Name: I'll Always Love You Sodots
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    Author: Frank Maguire
    ASL Info:    57 / UK
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 1846/1390/288
    Words: 156
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1151
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       An expression of love.


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    dotsI'll Always Love You Sodots
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    When I canít sleep, or when I weep
    And my troubles I just see
    Amidst my rain, I feel such pain
    But you come and comfort me
    When you are near, you kill my fear
    And I want to let you know
    Come night or day, in everyway
    Iíll always love you so

    When I feel sad, when times are bad
    And my world just falls apart
    When days I rue, and nights are blue
    You brighten up my heart
    Your manners such, your soothing touch
    And you always seem to show
    Such love on high, and that is why
    Iíll always love you so

    When I review my love for you
    My heart still skips a beat
    My eyes, they glow, I tremble so
    As our time draws near to meet
    When we embrace, your pretty face
    Still sets my heart aglow
    Through your blue eyes, I realise
    I'll always love you so.




    Submitted on 2008-01-07 17:19:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You are a master of love poems. The way you write , your rythmn, your choice of words. Such a masterful blend a great chef creating a tantalizing read to satisfy our souls. thank you, Jerilynn.
    | Posted on 2008-02-10 00:00:00 | by Jerilynn | [ Reply to This ]
      
    Wow, this is Excellent


    A superb poem; it flows so beautifully while reading it and portrays such gentle and genuine love for a loved one.

    Very well written
    ...........and your feelings of gratitude and happiness are evident through every word........
    you sure are quite talented in writing

    .....this was short and sweet, and yet you have managed to fill in quite a lot, which is an art and appreciable.

    Good work.
    | Posted on 2008-01-22 00:00:00 | by mdsouza | [ Reply to This ]
      Outstanding love poem, that should make some lucky gal very happy! Frank, your poems are all so excellent that I feel like I'm just repeating myself everytime I make a new comment!

    Outstanding work from Elite's master of verse!!!
    | Posted on 2008-01-08 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      Absolutely amazing! I love your rhyming scheme and word choice. It's definitely unique!

    Keep writing!

    -Missa
    | Posted on 2008-01-08 00:00:00 | by musikismylife16 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wonderful! I love the poem, I love the rhyming pattern and the flow. However there is one area that threw me off a little.

    "My eyes, they glow, I tremble so
    As our time draws near to meet
    When we embrace, your pretty face
    Still sets my heart aglow"

    The use of glow and aglow in the same stanza kind of stops the flow of the poem.I would suggest a different word for glow, like maybe shine.

    "When I review my love for you
    My heart still skips a beat
    My eyes, they shine, I tremble so
    As our time draws near to meet
    When we embrace, your pretty face
    Still sets my heart aglow
    Through your blue eyes, I realise
    I'll always love you so."

    Just a suggestion.

    Otherwise I love this poem it is very touching.
    Great work.

    &#9829;Donna&#9829;
    | Posted on 2008-01-08 00:00:00 | by PrettyHeart | [ Reply to This ]


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