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    dots Submission Name: Random Girldots
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    Author: Passionbyapathy
    ASL Info:    18/M/Ohio State
    Elite Ratio:    6.06 - 174/189/127
    Words: 248
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 345
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 805



    Description:
       Dedicated to someone I met on this site, named Meghan, who wanted me to write a poem about her. This is the way I saw her in my head, as I talked to her.


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    dotsRandom Girldots
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    I met a random girl
    She writes poems and stories
    Voice overs of her thoughts
    A little voice inside her head
    Speaks in whispers
    And whispers in screams

    She wants to see the world she says
    Wants to travel to the doorstep
    Of one hundred different homes
    Of people she has never met
    And will probably never know

    She was so modest with herself
    That she couldn’t tell me who she was
    Or who she is
    Or who she wants to be
    But I read a likeness in her eye
    Finally someone truly unique enough
    To give definition to the word




    Submitted on 2008-01-07 18:23:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The first stanza is, in its own way, the best one. It has the simplicity to introduce the piece without being overdone. Overall, I really liked it =]
    | Posted on 2008-09-10 00:00:00 | by Kat Tudor | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a wonderful piece. My only advice is ditch the 1st stanza. After that it absolutely sings!

    Peace, love and all that other junk,

    Joe
    | Posted on 2008-01-18 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      Thank you so much! It was beautiful. I'll cherish it. And you really did capture me in the poem, with only so few words we've spoken. wow.
    | Posted on 2008-01-07 00:00:00 | by Draumrkopa | [ Reply to This ]


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