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    dots Submission Name: On Friendshipdots
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    Author: Passionbyapathy
    ASL Info:    18/M/Ohio State
    Elite Ratio:    6.06 - 174/189/127
    Words: 562
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
    Total Views: 328
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1714



    Description:
       A poem on friendship, and what it means to me.


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    dotsOn Friendshipdots
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           Life is to me
    A series of pitfalls
    Where every time you fall down
    You look around for someone to catch you
    Only a few do
    And those are the ones you keep
    The ones you remember
    The ones you love
    Because to them you are something
    Something more then nothing anyway
    And for most isn’t that all we can ask?
    Life is about the happiness you experience
    With the people you care about
    And the patience you show
    To those who don’t deserve it
    Life is a constant struggle of
    Doing right, and wanting wrong
    Of crying out softly when you want to scream
    And running in circles, looking for a direction
    We are all a little crazy
    To what degree I cannot say
    But the craziest
    When combined with
    The kind and the compassionate
    Always make the most interesting friends
    Fellow compatriots
    On the journey of a lifetime
    To destinations yet uncharted
    But with smiles painted
    On the faces of us all
    Its amazing what a few good people
    That you could have never met
    Never taken the time to love
    Can do to change who you are
    And who you strive to be





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      i think that this piece is great. I think that it really catches what true friendship should really be about.

    It's funny how we find out who our real, true friends are. just when we think that we know who they are, we are wrong....and we only find out who our true friends are when we go through our hardest downfalls
    | Posted on 2008-12-22 00:00:00 | by longwinterdays | [ Reply to This ]
      i wish my friends though as much of friendship as you do...then i would still have friends. this was a nicely written piece, very simple and straightforward but not boring.

    Life is a constant struggle of

    Doing right, and wanting wrong

    that is my life right there...or at least it was until i jumped off that mountain and started doing what i wanted....
    oh what dark years these have been, but full of adventure (what little adventure still lives in this world...i am too old for this place!) and happiness even in the darkness.

    i think that the structure of the poem is nice...i like pieces that have good spacing...sometimes it helps the poem flow...

    anyway, you never leave me disappointed....very nice write.
    | Posted on 2008-07-31 00:00:00 | by was_i_ever_real | [ Reply to This ]
      I loved this. It's wonderfully written and very true.

    I've had a friend for almost thirteen years. We've met in pre-school and are still friends. She is always there for me no matter what. When my uncle had a brain tumor, she helped me through it. When I found out my uncles in Maine have cancer, she helped me through it.

    In all that we've been through, we are closer than sisters. I help her, she helps me and such. We spend time together and go to movies like normal friends. Some times when we went over each others houses, we wouldn't want to go home.

    So, I loved your poem. I'm sure you have a friend like that so, you know. Friends do help each other through everything and are always there for each other.

    No matter how much friends bug each other, they never leave your side if they truly are your best friend. You have friends, who are just friends, then you have best friends, who are like sisters.

    Sorry for so much information on me and such, it's a habit. Well, your poem was excellently written and flows nicely. Excellent job. Keep on writing and keep up the great work.

    I absolutely loved it. I'm going to add it to my favorites. Great job.


    ~Samantha~
    | Posted on 2008-01-08 00:00:00 | by The lost child | [ Reply to This ]
      nice. Kinda reminds me of mine. hehe. :D i like it.
    | Posted on 2008-01-08 00:00:00 | by bogg | [ Reply to This ]
      This is completely true, especially the last bit. It is for me, at least. And the entire thing read very well and incredibly smoothly. I actually finished it, as an example, a thing usually left only for SanctityExposed (check her out, amazingly gifted writer)
    My only gripe was 'then' is used improperly near the start. It ought to be 'than' as you are implying degree, not progression.

    I loved it, and it gets a +FAV from me, loved it loved it loved it. I think I'll be watching you.

    Keep in touch.
    | Posted on 2008-01-08 00:00:00 | by Flynn | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the layout of this piece being that it is about friendship and the piece almost models a path which could be the path which is taken with a friend I like imagery. I like that you stayed on the topic at hand which was friendship. Great work!
    | Posted on 2008-01-07 00:00:00 | by Thirst4Serenity | [ Reply to This ]
      I loved this one also. Did you JUST write it? If yes, then wow. If no, then still wow.

    Life is a constant struggle of
    Doing right, and wanting wrong
    Of crying out softly when you want to scream

    This was my favorite part. Mostly because I know exactly what you are saying here. And the part about the craziest combined with kind and passionate, that's me and my best friend to a T. Which is a saying that I never really understood. Awesome read/write.
    | Posted on 2008-01-07 00:00:00 | by Draumrkopa | [ Reply to This ]


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